I used the correct structure but I think I need to work on putting more personification into my narrative writing.
THE EERIE CAVE 🥶
Kate glanced across at Jessica and noticed that she was nervous too. The
guides had checked everyone’s equipment thoroughly and now the group was
about to abseil down a sheer rock face into the eerie, unknown depths of a
cave.
guides had checked everyone’s equipment thoroughly and now the group was
about to abseil down a sheer rock face into the eerie, unknown depths of a
cave.
They were shivering as if they were in a huge freezing fridge. Kate and Jessica
were going down the cave really slowly as if they were snails, Jessica was breathing
heavily with an eerie face. Kate just stopped in front of a really sharp ice shard, luckily the
guide grabbed her just in time, “I’m starting to regret exploring this cave,” said Kate.
were going down the cave really slowly as if they were snails, Jessica was breathing
heavily with an eerie face. Kate just stopped in front of a really sharp ice shard, luckily the
guide grabbed her just in time, “I’m starting to regret exploring this cave,” said Kate.
They could see a light shining from the distance like it was a flashlight,”finally”
said Jessica. All of a sudden the guide started hearing shattered pieces of ice
falling from the top of the cave, it was like it was raining ice shards. “RUNNN”
shouted the guide, so they all started running with fear on their faces. The End
said Jessica. All of a sudden the guide started hearing shattered pieces of ice
falling from the top of the cave, it was like it was raining ice shards. “RUNNN”
shouted the guide, so they all started running with fear on their faces. The End
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